I was a little confused at first, but it's very intriguing. The style seems a little different than your other one, and personally, I like it better. The Guardian idea was really sweet. :D
I noticed a few minor grammar mistakes, (grammar being the only thing I could possibly critique). Mostly that sentence about the pods being in a circle. . .
Thanks for sending it! =D I wish there'd been more to read.
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I was a little confused at first, but it's very intriguing. The style seems a little different than your other one, and personally, I like it better. The Guardian idea was really sweet. :D
I noticed a few minor grammar mistakes, (grammar being the only thing I could possibly critique). Mostly that sentence about the pods being in a circle. . .
Thanks for sending it! =D I wish there'd been more to read.
Thanks Jenn, for being the first to reply I sent you bonus material.
Heya...I got some ideas and what not. I'll bring em' down to the farm this weekend. Lookin' forward to seeing you guys.
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